Batter [words on wednesdays]

The word of the week is:

Batter

Definition of batter

verb:

  1. to beat persistently or hard; pound repeatedly.
  2. to damage by beating or hard usage.
  3. to deal heavy, repeated blows; pound steadily.

noun

  1. a damaged area on the face of type or plate.
  2. the resulting defect in print.
  3. a mixture in baking
  4. an aqueous solution of baked or deep fried goods.
Rainbow cake batter by moonlightbulb

Rainbow cake batter by moonlightbulb

Here is an excerpt from the short story collection, “There Are No Ghosts in the Soviet Union” by Reginald Hill

Chislenko did not pause but kept going to the seventh floor where by comparison things seemed almost calm. An elderly grey-faced man in lift operator’s uniform was leaning against a wall. An out-of-breath medic stood by him with a hypodermic in one hand and a jar of smelling salts in the other, but the liftman was taking his own medication from a battered gun-metal hipflask. The smelling salts could not mask the stink of cheap vodka.

A second medic crouched before the open lift making cooing and clicking sounds as if trying to coax a reluctant puppy out from under a low bed. Two firemen in green overalls stood indifferently by. Along the corridor, fractionally opened office doors were alive with curious eyes.

PRACTICE

Batter the keys and practice for five minutes using batter in its different forms. When you’re fin­ished, post your prac­tice in the com­ments section.

Also, extra credit if you use the word of the week in your daily practice!

My Practice

“I’ll paste ye to the wall, if ye come round here again, get lost.” Mrs. Grimshaw, shrieking like a banshee, down the bottom of the terrace. Two young men in suits were running up the cobbled street, puffing and panting, bumping into Tuesday’s drying sheets all the way up.

At number three, Mr Brown sat with his pipe in the rocking chair, the Spring air that was making the sheets crisp was chilling him to the bone but he did not move. Mrs Brown died the previous year and he could smoke in the house if he wanted, but habits were hard to lose. So he sat in the battered chair rocking to and fro smiling at something unseen.

Further up the terrace the twins were up to no good, flitting in and out of Miss Horsham’s, giggling madly bordering on an insane curdling holler. Later they would be walking up and down in Miss Horsham’s smalls followed by the incensed Mr and Mrs Grimshaw, the embarrassed Miss Horsham and the smiling Mr Brown, always one step ahead, as if each footfall was rehearsed on a grand stage.

I leaned against the wall watching the terrace, from its coming to life in the early hours of the morning as the men walked to the paper shop for the daily rag and a packet of twenty all the way through to this visual delight, showing life in a small town down to its underwear. Dad had been on the batter all weekend and was in a lockdown. I didn’t ever know whether to go or stay. I knew to my very core I was going to battered at some point, the timing was down to Dad, I just waited.

The frolics of the twins brought life in its full colour to my black and white world and I stifled a giggle, would I run in and steal a couple of bob from the kitchen drawer and run to the chippie for a bag of chips with extra batter bits, tons of salt and a drink of vinegar. The twins gave me the courage and I resolved to begin my quest when out of the corner of my eye I could see Dad swaggering up towards me. The white sheets billowing in the wind in their innocence belying the evil intent of my batterer.

About the Author

Suzie Gallagher

Suzie is scatty writer from Ireland trying to write her first novel, entitled The Only Temperance Bar in Ireland. She also writes worship songs, poems & short stories. You can find her at her blog and on Facebook.

  • Eyrline

    My great granddaughter was visiting. Her favorite activity was beating the batter for cookies. As I knew this was what she wanted, I retrieved the cookie mix from the pantry. I told her we needed one ege. She looked in the frigerator and didn’t see the eggs. They had been put in a special compartment. The egg was retrieved, and she used a wire whisk to batter the egg. Now, we need 1/3 cup of vegetable oil. First, let’s get the cup, I told her. We looked in the drawer, but it wasn’t there. Off she ran to the back bedroom. She came back with the proper cup. Now, I asked her, where is the oil. She replied she thought her Dad used it all. I suggested we use butter. We melted some butter and measured 1/3 cup. We poured the mix and butter into the eggs and she began to beat, and beat and beat. Soon, we had cookie batter.

    You hear so much about battered children. All you have to do with children is play games with them that teach them to do things. Children get bored and cry, and parents hit them for crying. Many are hungry or want warm clothes. Many parents are alcoholics and like their booze better than their children. Some of the battered children stories are grotesque. One parent left their ten year old in his bedroom without any food until he died. The father was on trial for his life, but peaded guilty to avoid the death penalty. We need to take better care of these precious children.

    • Kirsty Leigh

      I like the focus on the relationship between the granddaughter and her grandmother in the first passage. It made the second passage so much sadder.

  • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

    The wind howled and battered against the windows. The glass panes clanked ominously and she cuddled deeper into her warm bed. Briefly she wondered if they would close the schools tomorrow. There was so much she wanted to do. So much she wanted to avoid. The long, fear inducing math lesson. The slow, sweet smile of the boy who sat next to her and the blush that smile raised on her face. The battering of the bullies, who never let her be during the recess break. She fell asleep to the sound of the wailing wind.

    When morning came, she rose bleary eyed from her bed, and groped sleepily for her
    radio. The tiny voice blared out that the schools were closed. They had gotten
    more snow than had been anticipated. She smiled happily, thinking she’d spend
    the day in bed reading. So she threw open her blinds, and before was the sight
    of ruined trees, battered down by the wind and heavy snow. Ruined and yet
    beautiful, because they were half buried in snow, and the branches of the trees
    that still stood were lace patterns against the grey sky.

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      Guilia, I like this very much

      • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

        Thanks Suzie!! I think the view outside my window this morning inspired me :)

  • Steve Stretton

    Warning, this may be a bit black for some.

    Batter the batter until he is still. When this is done apply the batter. Make sure he cannot move or the crust will crack when baking. When ready, place in large pot. The pitcher should be soaked in gallons of rum until well pickled. The short stop may be added as garnish, or can be left for a later meal. When the battered batter’s batter is just crisp remove from pot. He is now ready for carving. The pitcher can be enjoyed alone, or with a shot of whiskey. The short stop should be taken as is.

    • http://joebunting.com Joe Bunting

      Very strange and funny, Steve. I wonder who is doing all this cooking with America’s pastime? Also, why do you think the different positions have such radically different tastes?

      • Eyrline

        Pujh, I enjoyed your essay on the battered woman and her obscession with baking. It may be that her husband had burned her when she tried anything that she was enjoying her freedom. It is also a form of trying to forget the past.

    • Kirsty Leigh

      Amazing and unexpected. I love it.

  • http://www.facebook.com/yvette.carol Yvette Carol

    Well done on your practice piece, Suzie, I thought it was great. And it really kind of took me away somewhere, onto those streets with the noise of children and the Tuesday sheets. Good work!

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      It is a long time since Monday was wash day and Tuesday was drying, followed eventually by Friday in the chippie for fish and chips!

  • Jeff Ellis

    In a tiny cabin, far away from anything or anyone, James sat with an empty canteen and four matches, staring at the door as it thrust repeatedly against its hinges. Outside, they battered on the windows. They battered on the walls and they battered on the roof. It would only be a matter of time before something got in.

    James had never suspected his getaway trip to end like this. He never suspected that any trip could end like this. Somewhere in the back of his mind he had yet to fully grasp that this was actually happening. It would only be a few minutes now before they burst in, fangs and claws, and devoured him. He might be able to push past them into the woods beyond, but he wouldn’t get far.

    Three of the matches were already burnt out and he dropped them into the canteen. He wasn’t sure why. Maybe even this close to a grizzly death, he hated the idea of littering someone else’s floor with discarded matchsticks. James struck the last match for the sake of it. He watched the fire burn down, down, down to his fingertips. He let it burn him, but when it did he yelped and dropped the spent match into the canteen with its peers.

    That was it. The last of his supplies. The end of a three week expedition into the Yukon. The end of the worst vacation anyone could ever take. That tiny part of him that still refused to believe this was happening thought that at least it was nice to have seen a bit of the unknown – to go out in a remote part of the world few people had ever seen. It would be nice to die a unique death.

    • http://www.facebook.com/yvette.carol Yvette Carol

      Whoa, your practice pieces always pack a punch, Jeff.

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Yvette :) I try, haha!

    • Puja

      Great read. You build the suspense and imagery really nicely.

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Puja! I’m glad you enjoyed it :)

    • Paul Owen

      All that battering really set the scene, Jeff. Great reading. Getting munched in the Yukon, not so much!

      • Jeff Ellis

        Haha, yeah I would not want to go out this way :P Thanks for reading, Paul. I’m glad you liked it.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Great practice! I’ve clearly been watching too much of The Walking Dead because all I could think of until I read Yukon was that he was trying to get away from the walkers.

      • Jeff Ellis

        Haha,I think it’s safe to say that walkers were a good assumption. I’m glad you liked it Giulia!

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      Jeff, I like it, unique in the placing and yet familiar.

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Suzie!

  • Paul Owen

    First things that came to mind had to do with music and food. No surprise there:

    I stood up from the drum kit, sweat dripping off my brow. The snare drum head
    looked a bit battered; needed to replace that soon. My ears felt battered, too,
    but that would wear off in a while. Playing drums had to be the best aerobic
    exercise ever.

    Heading upstairs and into the kitchen, I grabbed a bottle of water. Time to make
    dinner. I decided on fish for tonight. That light batter I made last time was a
    hit with the whole family, so I wanted to try it again. While the fish was frying,
    I thought about our gig coming up this weekend. Hoped the band was ready. Maybe
    I’d practice more this evening to get a little sharper before tomorrow’s
    rehearsal.

    Everyone loved the fish again. My wife was convinced it was the fish itself that tasted
    so good, but I knew it was the batter. As we were cleaning up the dishes later,
    my son said something about his team at school getting a talented new bladder.
    That didn’t sound right.

    “What does a bladder have to do with baseball?”

    “Not ‘bladder’, Dad, ‘batter’. ‘Batter’! Can’t you hear anything?”

    Hmmm, maybe it was time to invest in earplugs.

    • Puja

      Haha I loved the last lines! Nice work.

      • Paul Owen

        Thanks, Puja

    • Steve Stretton

      Like Puja, I like the last lines. Very clever.

      • Paul Owen

        Thanks for the note, Steve

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      Good job Paul

    • Kirsty Leigh

      Great practice. Your use of the word of the day flowed naturally and the story is quite charming.

  • Kirsty Leigh

    Hi there. I’m new to The Write Practice but looking forward to participating. I’ve read some amazing articles and essays browsing through the site. I really hope you’ll share your feedback and criticism with me :)

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    Every night, crouching behind the semi-closed bedroom door, Stephanie would silently flip open the pages of her favourite book.The text was badly battered. The paper was dog eared and smudged with finger prints but she was determined to memorize the words. She’d stay up past bed time, trying to keep quiet and not be found out. Sometimes, she’d pretend to be a mouse hiding from her parents’ cat or she’d imagine her limbs covered in soft batter, making her movements slow and muffled. For years, she read by the half-light that shone through the cracks between the door frame and the hinges. Moving each word along this slither of fluorescence, she would mouth their sounds until her eyes began to swim and the words turned into ranks of ants marching along in single file.

    • Paul Owen

      Welcome aboard, Kirsty. I love the imagery in this passage. “Slither of fluorescence” – great stuff. Looking forward to reading more!

      • Kirsty Leigh

        Thank you Paul

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Nice practice! I used to read past my bedtime when I was a kid too. Oddly my parents never caught me.

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      Welcome Kirsty, they’re a friendly bunch and let people like me loose on a Wednesday. Good practice. You could easily edit this to a workable piece.

      • Kirsty Leigh

        hahaha. Thanks Suzie :)

  • sejones

    The waves batter the rocky tide pools of Moonstone Beach, and Sharon contemplates the simple way the anemones withstand the beating. Their tentacles sway to and fro like a rocking chair. Tough sons a bitches, she thinks.

    Charlie, Sharon’s husband, shuffles along the shore. She watches him walk. He is bundled-up in a puffy jacket. His white hair peeks neatly out from under his black cap. He leaves her to enjoy the tide pools alone. Lately, she’s been able to hide her anguish from Charlie. She saves her tears for the middle of the night when Charlie is snoring.

    Sharon rests her gloved hands on the armrests of her wheelchair. Her hearing aids are turned up too loudly today, so she can hear herself wheezing. She rubs her pointer finger of her right hand against her middle finger. God, I wish I could get a smoke, she thinks. Smokes is what got you into this mess, you old coot.

    Charlie’s turned back now. His curled mustache bends upward into his cheeks as he smiles at her. Sharon smiles, and wonders how long they can keep this act up. She hears him cry when he talks on the phone with Forrest, their youngest son. Her Charlie is a good man, and he’ll put the rest of his life on hold to be her nurse. He’s always been the softy; the one who’d give to the kids when they’d whine for a candy in the checkout aisle. He’d never be ready for her to go.

    The day is grey, and the anemones don’t look so colorful. We’re the tough ones, Sharon thinks. But this is enough battering for me. I’m ready to break loose.

    • Puja

      Lovely, sad scene. Thanks for this!

      • sejones

        Thank you for reading it!

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      sejones, sweet practice, good job

      • sejones

        Thanks you!

  • Puja

    This made me kind of sad writing it, but hope it’s a good read nonetheless.

    Batter

    Deanna was humming. Humming and baking. It upset the other women, to the point that they swiveled blood-shot eyes Ms. Alba’s way and avoided the kitchen whenever they heard the high strains of “Natural Woman” drifting out of it, along with the smell of coffee cake.

    Deanna sifted the batter with a rubber spatula she’d found in a drawer, then, using a whisk from home, beat the creamy brown mixture. A little too vigorously, Maria would murmur to anyone who listened.

    Ms. Alba listened to Deanna’s off-key humming from the sitting room. It had been like this for days–the humming and the nonstop baking. Chocolate chip brownies, strawberry cupcakes, banana nut muffins, even a tres leches cake the other day for one of the children’s birthdays. Delicious baked goods churned out at top speed, like she was a determined batter hitting the ball over the fence every time she approached the oven. It was sweet, yes, but it wasn’t quite right.

    Deanna had been like this since the day she came to the Shelter for Battered Women and Children. On that morning, she’d shared with Ms. Alba in a voice that never quavered, her husband’s preoccupation with heat– irons especially–and experimenting with their effects on her skin.

    It usually preceded lovemaking, she said calmly. “Guess he was just trying to batter, I mean, ‘butter’ me up.”

    Ms. Alba had heard a number of stories in her time managing the shelter; but it took all her composure not to gasp at both the treatment Deanna had received and the attempt at a joke.

    And then there was the baking. Hobbies were good, wonderful for the women, of course. She would never discourage it except…except Deanna was so jovial about it. And Ms. Alba had a bad feeling, she thought to herself as Deanna delved into the Beatles and icing, that the baking was anything but therapeutic.

    • Jay Warner

      It makes me wonder what will happen when Deanna comes out of her denial and realizes what she has experienced is not normal. How will she cope with the reality of her situation? Your essay left me wanting to read more.

    • Magdalena

      This story drew me right in…A little over kill with the “batter” but, hey, it’s the assignment for the day. I love that I can smell, taste, hear and feel everything in this scenario

    • http://twitter.com/quickreaver Mrs. Griffin, I say!

      This was really lovely! Brutality notwithstanding, of course.

    • sejones

      Very sad. The contrast between the joys of life and the horrors of life confuse the reader a bit.

    • Kirsty Leigh

      I loved your story. The connection you’ve forged between baking (various kinds of batter) and the story of a battered woman is unexpected and also, incredible. Your characters are so very real, even the ones unknown and off-stage feel tangibly present.

    • Paul Owen

      That is sad, Puja, but great reading. Now I’m hungry, too :)

    • Jeff Ellis

      This is awesome, Puja, and really sad – as many great stories are.

    • Steve Stretton

      Ouch, a very poignant account of one man’s inhumanity to a woman. As a man I cringe at the treatment he meted out to her. The baking somehow made it all the worse. Very affective writing.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      I got one of those feelings where I want to know more, but I don’t because it’s so horrifying to think of what else might be in Deanna’s past. If she can make light of that, then what else has that man done to her?

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      lovely writing about a not lovely subject

  • http://twitter.com/quickreaver Mrs. Griffin, I say!

    “Off the fence off the fence off the fence,” Zane screamed, and Jack knew
    it was bad because Zane never screamed. Almost never. Jack heard his brother
    only because he was attuned to the particular timbre of his voice—albeit several
    notches higher right now—but it was almost impossible to parse the words for
    the roar of blood and battering in his ear. The big Swede was plunging his fist
    at Jack’s face over and over, and if not for the curl of Jack’s broad shoulder,
    he’d probably have been on the mat by now.

    “OFF THE FENCE, JACKIE! FLIP HIM FLIP HIM!” It was Zane’s shrill chant and finally, it clicked. Or something snapped. Jack took one last slam to the cheek before he got his foot around the Swede’s ankle and pulled. Both men went down hard and Jack fell on the other’s face with both fists. The rest was a mental smear. It wasn’t a minute before the ref pulled them apart. The Swede’s face looked like curdled batter, formless and swollen, kneaded too long. And Jack’s hands were red.

    • Jay Warner

      I can really feel the energy in this scene, and like the way you integrated the word “batter” into your narrative.

    • sejones

      So many excellent word choices here. Words like “roar,” “plunging,” “snapped,” “smear,” and “curdled” make this piece beautifully gruesome.

    • Paul Owen

      “A mental smear” – I like it!

    • Puja

      Well-written action and I liked the opening!

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Good job! I agree with the others, great opening, great use of words. Very exciting piece.

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      My guilty pleasure..

  • Jay Warner

    Edward had the appearance of someone meandering aimlessly through the Battersea Gardens, but his purpose was anything but aimless. On this cold, sunny day in early March he was headed specifically for the Tea Terrace Garden where he would be instrumental in restoring its former grandeur. His collar pulled up, his hands shoved deep in the pockets of his overcoat, Edward surveyed the terraces and shook his head. He was hard put in the bitter cold spring air to imagine what it would look like in June. Plants lay battered and bruised on the semi-frozen loam. Some semblance of purpose was imaginable but not visible as of yet. The yellow-painted cupolas stood in a line, stoic and weathered, their stained sides like someone had thrown a bowl of batter at them and let it drip unmercifully down the side. Edward mulled over his dilemma, how would he ever resurrect the Battersea Tea Terrace to its original glory?

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    • http://twitter.com/quickreaver Mrs. Griffin, I say!

      I particularly like this line: “Plants lay battered and bruised on the semi-frozen loam.” So simple, but really paints the picture.

    • Magdalena

      Love stories of “makeovers”. Great language!

    • sejones

      I agree with Mrs. Griffin.

    • Kirsty Leigh

      Beautiful language. Descriptive and engaging.

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      e… what!
      Good descriptive piece, I went to Battersea last time in London and it brought back memories of the fair that used be there, where now is the Tate

      • Jay Warner

        thank you, that’s the feeling I was looking for, the tattered remnants of the fair and a time when it was thought to be savable, before the Tate.

  • Victoria

    She found herself standing before him, finger pointed at his immovable face, battering him with insults. She knew where this would lead but couldn’t seem to stop herself. His interior iron wall slammed down. He said nothing and stared straight ahead at the TV and leaned back in his LazyBoy letting the insults bounce off his steel facade. She had lost him.

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      Good job Victoria

    • Kirsty Leigh

      Wow. A strong scene. I love the simplicity and poignancy of the last line.

    • Paul Owen

      Great scene, Victoria. I liked the “interior iron wall” imagery.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      This is great! I have an image of the iron wall slamming down and the idea that he’s hurt by what she’s said.

  • David L

    His job was to batter the small, spherical object. In fact,
    many people paid and came early to see him batter this object in a
    pre-performance ritual. He consistently delivered a battering to the object of
    his pounding. This delighted the spectators and they waited with great
    anticipation.

    It was his time to perform. Though the announcer called him
    by the wrong name because of a batter in this day’s program, everyone knew who
    he was. He proceeded to the rectangular box carefully striped on the ground.
    The cheers swelled. And all he could think about was the batter he had to mix
    for his wife’s birthday cake later that evening. Ingredients mixed, stirred,
    more ingredients, more stirring…a successful batter is the key to a good
    cake. Could he do it? His mind raced, until interrupted.

    STRIKE THREE! The batter struck out…

    • http://twitter.com/pootlesuzie Suzie Gallagher

      good job David, wondered which sport it was going to be, I was plumping for golf!

    • Jay Warner

      I enjoyed reading this. You used the word of the days in a creative variety of different forms in one short essay.