Metaphor, Simile, and a Big Place to Grow Grass

This guest post is by Neal Abbott. Neal has written three novels, one of which, Prince, is being released November 6th. He blogs at A Word Fitly Spoken. You can also find him on Twitter (@nealabbott). Thanks Neal!

A student once asked her English teacher, “What’s a metaphor?” and he replied, “It’s a big place to grow grass.”

I don’t think he understood the question.

We’ve grown with up the distinction between similes and metaphors, but in a technical sense, all comparisons are metaphors. But let’s stick to this separation of powers, and think about the problem with similes and why metaphors may be better for your writing.

The Problem with Similes

Similes are far more common than metaphors. So if you write profusely in simile, your writing will not be distinct, and will die of being common.

Metaphors are harder to write, but they sing like Caruso—wait, I just used a simile to tout the virtues of metaphors. See, I told you it’s harder than you thought.

Similes often suffer because of bad writing. They are sometimes attached to weak being verbs but not always. Something like, “Her voice bounced like a ball,” or “His jaw dropped as if it were made of iron,” use good action verbs. These similes are fine.

But too often they follow the dreaded “is.” Any simile like, “Her singing is like …” or, “The old house was like …” are so bad, I didn’t even want to finish the simile. The failure of these similes is that they are all examples of telling. Instead of telling me what her singing is like, or what the old house is like, show me how her singing or the old house can be compared to whatever it is you wish to compare them to.

The Solution to the Problem

Bad similes are an easy difficulty to fix (is that a paradox or an oxymoron?). Just turn your simile into a metaphor. Take the sentence, “His head is like a baloney.” I know. I want to punch myself right now for writing that. Writing that loathsome sentence has made me more stupider, and I am afraid I shall never recover unless I fix it.

All you have to do is make “baloney” modify “head” in an adjectival sense and make the head do some kind of action, or at least put it in a sentence without an intransitive verb. If that confused you, let me show you what I mean.

➢ His baloney head looked too large for his body.
➢ His baloney of a head couldn’t manage to keep his ballcap on in the wind.
➢ His head glistened in the same way baloney does when it’s left out in the sun.

Well, none of these are perfect, but maybe they illustrate how any simile can be changed into a metaphor, and why that may be preferable. You can do better than these illustrations. You are only limited by your creativity.

And remember, a metaphor is like a smile.

PRACTICE

White about a half-dozen to ten lame similes, then put them aside. Do something else for about ten minutes. Look them over and write a few of them again as wonderful and powerful metaphors. Go do something else for about ten minutes.

When you return, write for fifteen minutes about any subject you wish using your new metaphors.

When you’re finished, post your practice in the comments section. And if you post, please give some feedback to a few other writers.

Good luck!

About Joe Bunting

Joe Bunting is a writer and entrepreneur. He is the author of the #1 Amazon Bestseller Let's Write a Short Story! and the co-founder of Story Cartel. You can follow him on Twitter (@joebunting).

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