Mania [words on wednesdays]

The word of the week is:

Mania

Definition of mania:

Noun

  1. excitement manifested by mental and physical hyperactivity, disorganization of behaviour, and elevation of mood;
  2. excessive or unreasonable enthusiasm often used in combination with the object of such enthusiasm

Synonyms 

  • aberration, axe to grind, bee in bonnet, compulsion, craving, craze, craziness, delirium, dementia, derangement, desire, disorder, enthusiasm, fad, fancy, fascination, fetish, fixed idea, frenzy, hang-up, idée fixe, infatuation, insanity, lunacy, monomania, obsession, partiality, passion, preoccupation, rage,

The Sphinx without a Secret by Oscar Wilde

 “Then why did Lady Alroy go there?”

“My dear Gerald,” I answered, “Lady Alroy was simply a woman with a mania for mystery. She took these rooms for the pleasure of going there with her veil down, and imagining she was a heroine. She had a passion for secrecy, but she herself was merely a Sphinx without a secret.”

“Do you really think so?”

“I am sure of it,” I replied.

He took out the Morocco case, opened it, and looked at the photograph. “I wonder?” he said at last.

Mania

“l’ai-je eu? (did I have it?); l’ai-je? (do I have it?); and l’aurai-je? (will I have it?)” by Derrick Tyson

PRACTICE

Be manic for five minutes, using the word “mania” as fre­quently as you can. When you’re fin­ished, post your prac­tice in the com­ments section.

Marla4  – kudos to you for using it in another practice (possibly unintentional)

Also, extra credit if you use the word of the week in your daily practice!

My Practice

They called it mania and put her away in a prison of a place. She felt like a princess  locked in a tower until the baby was ripped from her stomach. After that her life seemed to be put on hold. For years she endured medications and experimental procedures until she no longer remembered the sweet smell of freshly mown lawns and the sound of water cascading over rocks. She knew only disinfectant and clanking keys in doors.

Earlier this year she was to leave, but didn’t know how. She had no visitors and could not remember any relatives. The words mammy and daddy alien on her lips. Today though, with help from the nice lady with the blue cardigan niece was coming. Niece was going to take her home.

A wedding. Niece explained the concept over and over to Blue but she kept forgetting. The girl, niece’s girl was having this wedding and Blue was to go. It was in the church. Not the church they went to every week a different one. Niece told Blue it was her old church. But that was the chapel in the place. She knew no other church.

Pale blue hat sat on Blue head, with a darker bluejacket and inbetween blue dress. New shiny shoes covered her stockinged feet. She kept looking at her roundy face in the shiny shoes. The drive was long to the church of the wedding and Blue looked out of the window of the car at the grass and walls and cows lying down. “Tis gonna rain, mind I tell you” said the daddy of Niece.

Blue knew they all had names, but they were just out of reach in a cloudy part of her mind where thoughts nudged each other in the fog but she couldn’t string them together. Inside the church Niece told her where to sit. A man, elderly, came up and whispered to Blue in an odd croaky voice she recognised. Her thoughts suddenly stopped tumbling in a vortex and formed coherent sentences, but she remained silent and turned to face the front again.

She hadn’t needed to turn to him, she knew him, she knew his leathery touch and smell of pipe and pomade. She remembered the night of undying love on the freshly mown lawn by the babbling brook. She allowed silent tears to flow throughout the ceremony as she remembered. The black sheep, the loose woman, the hysterical girl, the mania driven fallen maiden, all these and more. Daddy had slapped her, hard on her right cheek causing it to redden and smart. Mammy had cried. Jonathon, her brother, threatened to kill Marty Connors. Niece, her name was Julie, Julie’s daddy was Jonathon, it all flooded back including the long drive to the place. They locked her into a mental asylum. The people took her baby and they did horrific things.

But none of that hurt as much as Marty Connors walking away from her, that night in the rain when she told him she was pregnant, that night when she screamed into the driving  rain to turn back and run away with her, that night when her heart turned black. So yes bleat away quietly black sheep, hush your tears, remain silent, for now.

At the reception she listened to stories, of people she knew from that long ago time. Her ears primed and ready to hear more of Marty Connors. Did he marry? Did he have more children? Was he happy? Did he ever think of her? She thought of the whisper, “How’s it goin, Ruthie?” Did he not know where she had been? Questions, questions, questions rivalled for position in her mind, a mania of questions. The people were dancing to “The Siege of Ennis” twirling and swirling, their smiles fixed on contorted bodies.

Later the music slowed, she saw Marty Connor weaving through the mass on the dance floor, she looked away. He stood in front of her, again the heady perfume of his body curled out like wisps of smoke and she like a chimney sucked it all in. He took her hand and led her to the dancefloor. The other dancers moved back as they began a waltz, a dance outside of time, that took them back to those nights of endless love. She got her answer not just in the way he held her so gently as if she was the porcelain figurine on Nana’s mantelpiece but in the hush in the room. It was a moment people would talk about for years, “I was there when…” like people remember what they were doing when they heard Kennedy was shot. Jonathon was weeping, Julie was clasping her hands as if in prayer, the bride and groom the only ones oblivious in the selfish love of newly weds to history being rewritten to a different ending, that their story was a bit part in a bigger story.

Ruth was still thinking, it was so new to her that she couldn’t stop, her thoughts moving from Marty now as she was held in the rhythm of the song to the song of motherhood, her baby, grown now. Her first questions held the key to her lifesong. Was it a boy or child? Did it live?

About the Author

Suzie Gallagher

Suzie is scatty writer from Ireland trying to write her first novel, entitled The Only Temperance Bar in Ireland. She also writes worship songs, poems & short stories. You can find her at her blog and on Facebook.

  • RKV

    “Have you ever met a man as mania as M.H Murdock?” I asked. “He is quite a mania man, especially when it comes to flying. He often becomes very mania when he is flying in his helicopter; spinning and twirling into the sky while singing oprea. If you have ever been flying with him, you would know it is a very frightful experience. When he flies, though, it seems his helicopter is also mania–which seems to make Murdock even more mania–if that is possible….”

    (writing silliness… M.H Murdock(A-Team) was the first person I thought of when I was reading the deifinition of the world “Mania”… I also tried to use the word as much as possible in regards to him and his “object”–the helicopter.

  • Carmen

    Re-watched One Flew over the Cuckoo’s Nest recently so if it brings to mind images of Louise Fletcher and Jack Nicholson, that’s why :)

    Little lightning bolts struck behind the lids of my eyes as knuckled my fists into them. The colours were dazzling.

    ‘Sylvia, are you listening to what I am saying? You have been diagnosed as a manic depressive.’

    I was not listening to the man in the suit across from me, and continued to rock back and forth with my eyes covered.

    That was two weeks ago. I had not really paid attention. I looked up and took in the room. About ten other women of all ages sat around me, immersed in various activities. A colourful mixed salad of personality disorders, manias and anxiety cases. We were all harmless, I am sure. Just needed to rest and recuperate. That
    doctor though. He runs the place and likes to watch from his little corner office. He is maniacal in his management. Doctors should not take so much pleasure from their positions. I pursed my lips and regarded his darkened
    office window coolly from across the room. I would take my manic depression, all the manias in the room in fact, over his zeal any day.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      Carmen, good practice, love the thoughts on the doctor

  • Daniel Lynch

    “Allow me to introduce myself, I am Erin, and I am here to recruit you Jessica, and provide you with some… important information.” She paused, an infectious smile spread across her face. The moonlight made her white hair glow, her fragile frame visible through faint white cloth, draped around her shoulders in a crude fashion.

    “Let’s see, where to start. Well, there are two worlds, the world you live in, Overland, and the world I live in, Mania. The people in Overland, have no concept of Mania, that’s why I’m here to tell you. Why do I tell you this information? You will know in due time. Let me start.”

    “Mania is a place where there are no boundaries, you are free to do what you want and where you want, within reason of course. It is a place filled with good people, we have communities, each for every interest you may have. You said you were a psychic didn’t you? Well, you should meet with the group appropriately named ‘Third-Eye Syndicate’. They are a band of old souls who continue to help people in need.”

    “You may visit Overland at any time, though it won’t do you any good, and it is thoroughly discouraged without permission of ‘The One’. He is the leader of our people, he organises us, and lets us know if we are needed to enter Overworld. Are you with me?”

    Jessica nods, though she is still unsure where this conversation is going. Erin’s presence in her bedroom made her very uneasy, she wanted her to leave but thought better than provoking the strange woman. Jessica rolled her eyes, unable to hide her disinterest, and tiredness.

    “Okay, well, I’m running out of time, when you come to Mania, be sure to find look for me. I will wait for you in The Room. Goodbye Jessica… and welcome.”

    With that remark, she retreated into the shadows of the room and disappeared.

    There was a deep roaring sound outside, Jessica felt your heart race.She got up and opened the window. The sky was on fire. Streams of heat trailed behind dark spheres all heading toward the earth. She swallowed hard and shut her eyes as the roar became louder. Instantly she was consumed by deafening silence and coldness.

    Around her she could hear people chatting amongst themselves, some children laughing. Opening her eyes she found she was in a large ancient room, full of people and damp aromas. A young woman dressed in a simple white cloth turns to face you. A smirk curling at the side of her cute, yet stern face.

    “Welcome to Mania. Afterlife of the innocent, heaven for the talented.” She crowed.
    “The selection begins soon, be sure to keep your number, if you lose it, you will be stuck in here. Forever.”
    The woman forced a small circular disk into Jessica’s hands. The disk felt warm and sharp. It was hard to handle without touching it’s blade-like edges.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      I love where you have taken this Daniel, nice plot beginning to develop.

  • Paul Owen

    Wasn’t hard to get in character for this practice. I’m in character most of the time, actually…

    Trying to get through the front door was like stuffing those last few clowns into the clown car. What’s with guitar players, anyway? A mania had spread among us as we crowded up to the Fender display. “Mania” was a fitting term. The store had announced a “Strat-mania” sale, selling Stratocasters for bargain prices. It’s not like any of us needed another guitar, except that we did. I had three Strats at home already, but this next one I was thinking of would be slightly different, and way cool. Strat-mania, indeed.

    I shifted this way and that around the other maniacs until I reached my destination. Ooh, that green looked even better in person than on the website! Couldn’t beat the price, so I grabbed the axe and shuffled out of the crowd over to a sales rep.

    “Hey, did you know the case is included with that model”?, she said.

    A maniacal grin crept up on my face. “Sweet!”

    A new Strat, just like that. It would be the best guitar ever, until the next one came along.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Very nice.

      • Paul Owen

        Thanks, Giulia!

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      God I love strats. And to get the case too. Double score.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      used to work with a stratmaniac, they are the anorakists of anoraks. Good practice.

      • Paul Owen

        Haha, yes, we can be a bit rabid about our Strats!

  • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

    Here’s my practice:

    She was a book manic. That much might be obvious since
    the woman, was after all, a librarian. But her mania for the printed word was,
    he thought slightly out of control. The library was manically filled with materials,
    materials that were old and ratty and out of date, as well as glossy and
    squeaky clean books with spines that would probably groan when opened for the
    first time. It was probably the sign of some sort of disorder, he reflected
    musingly, to keep so many irrelevant books in the library. Like manic hoarding.
    But he sighed as he looked around and decided that although the woman might be
    a maniac, that he was going to begin the weed. She could lose her temper and
    shout at him tomorrow. He grinned as he began to toss the more ratty bins into
    the trash can. She had no idea how manic he was about cleanliness.

    • Paul Owen

      Competing maniacs – I like it!

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      NOOO SOMEBODY STOP HIM! I didn’t know there was such a thing as an “irrelevant book?” Giulia, you have to stop him!

      • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

        Karl, the “him” is me. I had to weed my school library. The other librarian wanted to hang on the discarded materials but I threw ‘em out. Now, don’t hate me everyone! I had to–some books were water damaged! And full of out date of info, like saying Pluto is a planet. So real life inspired the piece. And now I get to go book buying :D

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      Nice practice, well done Giulia

      • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

        Thanks Suzie!

  • Marla4

    Thanks for the shout out, Suzie!

    “I can bring the thunder and the lightning,” Cliff said. His hands were raised above his head, his
    fingers lifted to heaven. The sky was like
    blue velvet, the stars like rhinestones.

    “No more,” I said. “No
    more thunder. Please.”

    His face was tilted so that all I saw was the underbelly of
    his beard, still black, though Cliff was nearly sixty then.

    He ignored me. I, who
    had once been the object of all his attention, was now only one of many. I still ironed his chambray shirts. I still lay beside him in a brass bed that
    sat soundly in the middle of my tidy bedroom, but I was not adored anymore.

    It was the people outside, the crowds that gathered nightly
    on my farm near the pond where the geese muddled along the muddy shore, the
    mania they caused, who caught Cliff’s eye now.

    The blonde with the night club dress, her breath like a
    glass of zinfandel, was inching her way up the hill, her skirt lifted in her
    hand. Her heels were ruined but still
    she climbed, her eyes on Cliff, her breasts all but exposed in the light from
    the moon.

    “She’s failing,” Cliff said, and I made my way to the woman,
    my Crocs gripping the stones that led the way to her, and I took her by the
    elbow and I brought her up to the ridge.

    “My child,” he said, when we arrived, and then touched her
    brow.

    The crowd below called out, their voices like a roar that
    caught in the mist.

    “Where is your weakness?” Cliff asked.

    The blonde placed her hands on her stomach, and then lower
    so that her fingertips touched what would be the top of her panties, if in fact
    she was wearing them.

    “Aw,” Cliff said, and he put his own hands there. “Oppression,” he said. “The ilk of men who found their way. The way
    of man,” he said, his voice growing louder.

    The woman raised her arms and took Cliff by the shoulders. She was so small next to him, maybe 5’ 1” or
    5’2”, and he looked powerful, dressed in his black, tall as an oak, it seemed
    to me.

    There was something sensual about their embrace. The way his hands moved from her belly to her
    lower back, and how they stayed there as she gripped his shoulders in her two
    delicate hands.

    The crowd called out. “Heal the woman,” they said. “Bring down the power.” And then from the
    back another voice. “Heal us all,” a man
    cried.

    Cliff threw his head back. His hands rose, his fingers
    spread. He chanted. “Modilit, modilit,
    modilit,” and the woman collapsed on the ground, her hair like light on the
    dark ground.

    In a moment he would pick her up. The crowd would grow wild,
    the mania increasing until they started charging the hill. I’d seen it before.
    But now, it was just Cliff and me and this forsaken woman with problems of a
    female kind that were likely of her own making, on a hill under a glinting
    moon.

    Cliff picked up his cane, used for affectation only, and
    raised it with both hands over his head.
    Lightning whipped across the sky, so epic that it was like being on the
    inside of an eggshell that was exploding.
    The thunder followed, the boom so loud I covered my ears, and on the
    ground the woman writhed, in pain or pleasure, I did not know.

    • mariannehvest

      I love this Marla. I think in addition to your typical good writing, that i like it because in the end the lightening and the thunder do “whip across the sky”. It’s not what I had expected to happen but I’m glad it did happen like that.

      • Marla4

        Marianne,

        Thank you! I’m glad I surprised you.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      This is great! Had me from the beginning. “I can bring the thunder and lightning.” That’s one of those lines that just drags you in, bravo, bravo. Cliff seems like an interesting character.

      • Marla4

        Thanks Karl. I always love reading your work.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      Marla- beautiful, was there, well done

      • Marla4

        Thanks Suzie.

    • Carmen

      I also was captivated and enjoyed reading. Would love to read more and find out the characters stories. I thought Cliff sounded like a dick and I want to see him get his comeuppance :)

      • Marla4

        I agree about Cliff! Maybe I should work on this a little more.

    • Juliana Austen

      Great piece Marla – I have missed your voice!

      • Marla4

        Thank you Juliana. I’ve missed you too.

  • Parsinegar

    ‘Our mother planet has been gradually put to sleep with the mania its inhabitants have for so-called wisdom’. This was the least likely sentence one could expect to come out of Ram’s mouth, as everyone had accused him of being plastic-maniac due to his excessive use of plastics for packaging his factory products. But only God may know how mania for various things make people bias their attitudes toward gaining their goals, however, unwise.

  • Thomas Petri

    He had felt it before. Seen it even more times. Mania surrounded him in the form of the freaks and sickos with their tics and drooling and in-congruent words and half-sentences. he dared not breathe in the event that they might hear him. He stood in the shadows, still as death, with the short length of iron pipe in front of his chest. He had to escape before he became part of the twisted menagerie that inhabited this hole he had been dumped in. The walls were slick from rain. Not a handhold to be seen anywhere. He had to fight. but it was impossible.

    I would have written more but I ran out of time. I don’t have any idea where i was going with this. Also: First time posting on here :)

    • Juliana Austen

      Wow! I would have loved for you to ignore the 5 minute thing (a lot us do!) and just kept going with this. Some powerful imagery in there.

      • Thomas Petri

        Thank you. It means alot to me :) I’m not a native English speaker so it’s sometimes hard for me to know if what I write makes any sense.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Very nice! And welcome Thomas :)

    • Paul Owen

      I hope it’s the first of many postings, Thomas. In just that one paragraph, I felt I was right there with your character. And wishing I had a piece of pipe, too :)

      • Thomas Petri

        Ha ha! I will definitely be posting here more often. I need the practice.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      When my timer goes off I usually end up writing at least another paragraph – we won’t hurt you if you go over . :) Nice practice today Thomas.

      • http://joebunting.com Joe Bunting

        What he means by that is that he won’t hurt you. Me on the other hand? Watch out. ;)

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      good practice Thomas, and welcome.

    • Carmen

      Loved this, when we are all in a truly desperate situation we always come so close to losing it or becoming manic to a degree and your paragraph really holds that sense of desperation as we fight to keep hold of ourselves.

    • Marla4

      Great work Thomas!

  • http://www.facebook.com/audrey.chin.9655 Audrey Chin

    Suzie… this is an awesome story. Nothing needs changing. It’s perfect!

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      thanks Audrey

  • Steve Stretton

    It’s a strange word, mania. Man I a. I (am) a man, yet mania is for everyone, men and women. Who knows how many of us will be gripped in its clutches. How do we even know we have a mania? Often we don’t, until accused by someone else. Then we are more than likely to deny such a thing.

    Mania, it’s a taint on the soul, a great and giddy state of being, or, for some, a state of utter misery. Such is a mania.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      What a great perspective on the word. This is an awesome philosophical piece. Well done.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      very profound Steve

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      I like that line, a great and giddy state of being. What a neat practice.

  • Jeff Ellis

    Stephanie had a mania for sorrow. She chased it like a dream. Chased it like she chased away happiness when it found her. On a lonely night, when a book and a stoked fireplace were at hand, she lay in her room, far from warmth, and cried crocodile tears. She was an enemy of her own joy. A champion of sorrow.

    As the fire died down, down, down, the manic laughter bubble up, up, up from Stephanie’s gut and crept out of her into the unforgiving Michigan winter. It was a strange sort of euphoria. A release. A push deeper and deeper down through the earth of the subconscious to that glorious, shining, well of raw emotion. It spewed, like a geyser, from her until it was all gone, and only an embarrassed quiet remained.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      She sounds like a mania of emotions. :) Great writing Jeff!

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Karl, glad you liked it! :)

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      good practice Jeff

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Suzie!

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Love it!

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Giulia, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

    • Paul Owen

      Vivid description, Jeff. Nice!

      • Jeff Ellis

        Thanks Paul, I appreciate the compliment!

    • Juliana Austen

      “She was the enemy of her own joy” thought provoking piece – I have known people like that but never really thought about it. Thank you Jeff.

      • Jeff Ellis

        This is taken from my own life, actually. Little bouts of manic depression I experience, usually running their course in a night. Luckily I am able to see things on the brighter side whenever I’m free of them. Glad you enjoyed this Juliana :)

  • Debbie

    Suzie – I’m waiting to see what happens. Please continue writing this story.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      thanks Debbie!

  • Juliana Austen

    Lovely writing Suzie!
    Pages litter the table – printouts from my great NaNoWriMo novel. They were written in a manic haste, 50,000 words in a month! Madness! A recipe for mania if ever there was one.
    I pick up a page – red crossing out, green underlining, pencil notes scrawled in the margin. The “editing committee” and me have been hard at work.
    I have called an executive meeting this morning – for the voices in my head and me. There is only one agenda item “To continue or to cut our losses”. The voices have different opinions – the Manic Writing Fiend just wants to continue.
    “It is unmitigated trash – half of it doesn’t even make sense! You could be doing something worthwhile instead of this!” says the Cold One. “Like knitting!”
    “I still think there is a short story in there, might even be two.” Says the Optimist.
    “Yes, yes there is!” says Manic Writing Fiend “There are at least three and if I just write a few more chapters I could bridge it into…”
    “Stop!” we all say – this ground had been covered many, many times.
    “But – what if this is our only good idea? Don’t we owe it too ourselves to continue?” the Optimist whined.
    It was time for ME to take control of all these mad, maniacs who inhabit my head.
    “Fiend – tomorrow you can start on the historical novel – you know the one.” It’s eyes light up with a maniacal gleam.
    “But not yet” I hastened to add. “First we will pull together the possible short stories from this lot”. Cold one rolls its eyes and goes to sulk in the corner muttering. Optimist chirps happily at the suggestion.
    I breathe, a long slow breath in, a long slow breath out. I close my eyes and relax feeling the weight of the last few manic weeks lift from my shoulders.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      ha! Those critics in our head. Love the knitting nod.

    • Debbie

      Ha ha ha. How do you deal with yourself when you can’t stop your voices from driving you crazy. Very manic. Nice job.

    • mariannehvest

      Juliana – This is great! I hope the cold one takes a long winter hibernation, and please don’t start knitting. They are a wonderful trio (as written maybe not for you to have to deal with). I love the manic writing fiend when she gets a gleam in her eye when you say her eyes light up with a maniacal gleam. I’m personally with the optimist. She sounds like the most “normal” of the three.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      Love this!

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      This is great. You portrayed a legitimate internal struggle and in the end you take control. Awesome awesome awesome.

    • Carmen

      This is so accurate for me, flicking between doubtful and excited and a bunch of others things. Mastering them all is an art as much as writing

    • Marla4

      Perfect description of the inner editors! I love this.

  • Debbie

    The “Boss” looked down at all the women below him. They were pushing themselves against the doors, trying to open them, pushing each other to get to the other side of the doors. Even his security guards were beginning to panic. These women were almost to the point of creating a riot. They were on the verge of being dangerous to others around them. They all seemed to suffer from some version of mania, but had a single purpose in life. They couldn’t go anywhere else, not because they couldn’t physically move away from the doors, but because they were emotionally unable to change their behavior.

    This mania happened every Saturday. They would start to congregate at the doors at 6 AM even though their chances of possibly passing through the doors
    wouldn’t start until 10 AM. Four hours of this was becoming more than he could handle. And then there would be pandemonium for the next two hours. It was maddening for him to watch it. It drained him of his own sanity. He sometimes thought he needed to be medicated just to be able to deal with this craziness.
    Maybe he should just quit. But this was such a great job. He had been
    here for 30 years. Maybe he needed to find someone else to be here on Saturday mornings. That would resolve everything. But the women mesmerized him. He couldn’t take his eyes off them.

    He was beginning to perspire. His vision was starting to get blurry. He was sweating and his heart rate increased until he could feel his blood pulsating.
    His doctor told him his health was beginning to suffer, watching the mania happening below him. But he couldn’t pull himself away. He thought to
    himself “that one in the purple, she usually got through first”. He was
    sure the petite, blond would be hurt this time. She was in a bad position.

    In five minutes, they’d be through the door. He was glad he was standing above the women. They couldn’t hurt him up here. He saw the tall woman in the back
    getting ready to run. Her arms were in front of her, getting ready to push her way through. They all had that manic stare. They were becoming like animals. His security staff was getting ready. The bell rang. The doors opened. The stampeded started. He felt himself starting to faint. As he was going down, he saw the signs
    fluttering on the other side of the doors. He dreaded those words:

    SHOE MANIA EVERY SATURDAY
    75% off all shoes from 10 AM to Noon

    • Juliana Austen

      Love it! I laughed and laughed!

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      this is very funny. I thought it was going to be the wedding dress sale in NY, but shoes – genius

    • mariannehvest

      I thought it was going to be some kind of sale. It is scary how a crowd can be taken over by frenzy like this. I like the part particularly when he is starting to panic, yet can’t look away. The ending is hilarious. I do hope the petite blonde wasn’t crushed in the riot but then she probably needs to gain some weight.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      Oh my gosh, LOL!
      Women, take note: Your maniacal shopping is a hazard to men’s health.

  • mariannehvest

    Suzie! That was gorgeous! I really liked it. It’s a whole story in just a few words. I think you should submit it as flash fiction. Writing wise I like the paragraph that starts with “Blue knew they all had names , , , “. Wow!

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      thanks Marianne, there’s a submission coming up that I might consider but I will have to change a good deal (no online blah blah in the rules)

  • mariannehvest

    He looked at the sun flickering through the leaves of the birches and illuminating the sparkling green water of the river. He grabbed at tube of phthalo green and squirted some out onto his pallet. He dumped his brushes out on the ground so he could see them all at one. He picked a flat brush, dabbed it in the paint and began to cover the bottom of the canvas with short, broad strokes. As he worked he saw more and more colors in the water and in the swirling sky. He grabbed paint tubes and applied more colors to his pallet. He jabbed his brush into the small glistening mounds of paint and then dashed them onto the canvas. The colors began to blend losing their sparkle.

    He had another idea. He grabbed five canvases and lined them up. He looked from one color to the next on his pallet. He looked at the water. The colors, his thoughts, his movements, danced through his mind so quickly that he lost control, or rather he threw it away. He hit each canvas with numberless dashes of azure, then phthalo, then permanent green light. He laughed. He painted.

    He continued until dark. Then he went home and painted some more, painted his room with the warmer colors, browns and yellows. He didn’t sleep for days, and when they put him in the institution he painted the grounds there and the attendants.

    • mariannehvest

      Whoops I just realized as i was reading others’ entries that I tried to show mania without actually using the word. I’m leaving it like that.

      • Juliana Austen

        Yes and great mania it is too!

        • mariannehvest

          Thanks Juliana

      • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

        Well done i am all for breaking the rules! Especially from you

      • Debbie

        I think you should get extra credit for describing mania without using the word. It’s obvious in this piece.

        • mariannehvest

          Ha! Thank you!

        • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

          yea

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      I love the mania in this piece. I love the idea of mad painting. I do it all the time..

      • mariannehvest

        Thanks Suzie.

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      What a great demonstration of a painting maniac. I love the first paragraph it’s so vivid.

      • mariannehvest

        Thanks!

    • http://www.facebook.com/audrey.chin.9655 Audrey Chin

      Wonderful Marianne.

  • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

    What a practice Suzie! Mine:

    As red balls of shiny fury flew at him, hitting him in the ribs and cheeks matching flashes of red and white flew before his eyes like a kaleidoscope, a mania of bright colors before his eyes underneath the hot spot lights and the crowd raging with excitement. Melvin didn’t like boxing, not this aspect no sir, he did it because he needed a release. To be the center of attention for punching someone else in the face, a maniacal crowd roaring their pleasure or displeasure was not pleasing and he was no entertainer.

    These thoughts often found him backed into the corner of the ring with his opponent pummeling him. The punches flew at him faster than he could think or block with his arms and he just wished it would all be over so he could go home and paint. “But that’s you,” said his ex girlfriend, “That’s just like you isn’t it. To fall into life’s corner and give up.” Her face teased the backs of his eyelids while he felt the enemies fist smack against his cheek; a wet splat sounded and saliva rained from his mouth.

    He saw the darkness. “Hello?” he had said. He reached along the side of the wall and flipped the switch to see their faces, Sherry and whoever that man was. They looked shocked and scared and pulled the sheets up to cover their naked bodies. “Melvin no wait I can explain!” Sherry had started to protest but Melvin turned and walked away. He hadn’t seen her since but her voice, her face poked at his thoughts like a poker stick in a dying fire. “That’s just like you, isn’t it,” she said. “Turn and walk away, let everything happen to you.”

    He laughed, his opponent pausing temporarily to give him an eye of concern and confusion. He cackled maniacally, punching the man in the face where he saw not a man, but Sherry. His right hook smashed Sherry’s nose and the blood spraying forth like a red spray paint fed his mania. He laughed and pummeled Sherry. The crowd roared and held up signs that read: Melvin The Maniac!

    Sherry fell over and he followed her down, straddling her and hitting her in the side of the head. A bell rang furiously signaling the end of the match while the referee struggled to pull him off but he kept punching.

    • Jay Warner

      Great piece! I like Melvin’s “aha” moment (of mania) when he starts to see Sherry in place of his opponent. He definitely had to get some anger out, didn’t he?

      • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

        Thanks Jay, yes he did!

    • mariannehvest

      This is so well laid out. You use the flashback very effectively which must be hard to so in such a short amount of time. I like the moniker “Melvin the Maniac” too.

      • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

        Thank you! Can I be honest; before I started typing I thought of a name that started with an M just so I could use that. Hehe.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      ooh, Karl this is a really god practice, it made me squirm in the last two paragraphs (really hard to do believe me!) and I had to read it all again. Well done.

      • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

        That means a lot Suzie! I’m glad you picked this word today! “Maniacal” is one of my favorite words!

      • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

        Also, you said this is a really god practice. I’m not going to correct you; I’ll just go with that.

    • Debbie

      Very intense example of mania. Great writing.

    • http://twitter.com/JewelsCat Giulia Esposito

      You sound inspired in this piece Karl :) Great practice.

  • Yvonne Rupert

    Suzie, I LOVED your practice. I wanted to skip to the end to see what would happen, but your words kept me reading and anticipating. I must know: WHERE”S THE CHILD??? :) I certainly hope your practice turns into a finished piece. Lovely, vivid writing.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      thanks Yvonne, yes I think I will polish it up a bit. Blue is my favourite character after Mary (you’ll meet her from time to time)

  • Jay Warner

    Mania
    Pressured speech, that’s always what happens when she gets that crazy high feeling, a mania of swirling thoughts and visions that threaten to tumble out of her head like water out of a pitcher, spilling every which way except into the glass sitting forlornly on the table. That’s how it is when everyone defines you by your mania. “There she goes again,” they think, and roll there eyes at Marta as she babbles on. “Your mother should have named you Brooke,” Tammy said, “Babbling Brooke. Just look what a mess you’ve made of the table,” and she moved to wipe the spilled water from the oilcloth covering it.
    “But don’t you think this is the best idea ever? I want to build a greenhouse and fill it with plants, and seedlings, and flowers, I think that would be glorious in the winter to sit in the greenhouse, hothouse, what have you, with the warm condensation on the windows and green growing things all around and flowers in the most beautiful array of colors you ever saw. It would be like a riotous mania of petals – summer in the middle of winter”.

    • Yvonne Rupert

      I enjoyed this, Jay. On the outside, Marta appears clumsy in her manners and movements; but her ideas and joy are graceful and lovely. A really nice practice and a wonderful character.

      • Jay Warner

        thank you!

    • http://www.facebook.com/karl.tobar Karl Tobar

      Summer in the middle of winter; I like that. I like the comment she made about Brooke, too. You did a great job using mania so many times also.

      • Jay Warner

        thank you! I thought maybe I didn’t use the word “mania” enough but it seemed about right to me.

    • mariannehvest

      I love this especially the last few sentences that describe the greenhouse. I like the parts in second person too. It’s like she’s seeing herself from the outside. Very well done IMO.

    • http://www.facebook.com/people/Suzie-Gallagher/100001281206171 Suzie Gallagher

      a very perceptive description of mania. well done jay

    • Debbie

      Amazing use of words to demonstrate mania. Great job.