As a prose writer, I try to suss out where I can deepen and expand my stories, transform a limping clause into a sure-footed guide. Sometimes, as in the preceding sentence, I find metaphor to be the most efficient and evocative tool in my writer’s gym bag.
I say gym bag rather than toolkit because toolkit is overused these days, seen too often to register. Just as noted in this post about similes, overuse leads to cliché.
My brother Gerald is the black sheep of the family. Certainly this is accurate: black sheep stand out amidst a flock of their white-fleeced relatives. But today’s readers won’t stop to think about that, and the writer’s opportunity for powerful connection is diminished.
Metaphor Connects With Readers
Metaphor, by conflating two unlike things—often an abstraction like love and a concrete object like a rose (thank you, Shakespeare)—invites readers to connect with our stories via the boundless power of imagination. Or, as James Woods says in How Fiction Works, “[m]etaphor . . . is the entire imaginative process in one move.”
In other words, metaphor helps our stories run smoothly, with steady footing across even the rockiest of terrain, bringing our readers to those stunning vistas seen only from mountaintops.
At this point, some of us may think, vistas? I’m writing a cozy mystery; metaphor is for high-falutin’ literary writers. I don’t believe it matters whether we’re we’re journeying in the land of so-called genre fiction or lyrical prose; we want to connect with our readers and so we need to be able to use whatever craft elements will most effectively guide our readers.
Discover Unseen Metaphors
OK, but how do we get to those vistas, as we stumble and slip on the narrow switchback paths of language, words, sentences? My experience with revision suggests attending to our verbs can reveal our stories’ metaphors—metaphors we didn’t even know we were making.
What? Yes! More often than not, I find I’ve created metaphors without setting out to do so.
When I finished the third draft of my first (unpublished, practice) novel, I set out, in my fourth draft, to scrutinize my verbs. I did this scene by scene, in ten-minute work sessions, using my beloved felt-tipped lime green pen to circle each and every verb. Then I listed out all the scene’s verbs on a clean sheet of paper.
Lo and behold: I had consistently given my protagonist, Claire, verbs suggestive of archeology. She “unearthed” items in her backpack, “dug out” from a pile of paperwork, “dusted off” a romantic interest.
I had not consciously decided to make Claire a student of the past, but this revision work revealed my subconscious had an understanding of her I had failed to notice.
I extended this metaphor by choosing one of the verbs that most strongly resonated with me (unearth) and then going to my thesaurus and writing all its synonyms on a separate sheet of paper: dig up, uncover, discover. Discover led to find, locate, pinpoint, surprise, turn up, sight, strike, retrieve, scavenge, come upon, encounter, chance upon, alight upon, stumble upon, detect, scent, sniff, descry, spot, trace, track, ferret out, discern, perceive, ascertain, divine, learn, tell, unravel, fathom, plumb, verify, deduce, analyze, diagnose.
Metaphors Lead to Characterization
With this list in front of me, I made metaphors by combining these concrete verbs with a theme I already knew the novel had: love.
She stumbled upon love. She divined love. She pinpointed love. She retrieved love. She stumbled upon love. She unraveled love.
Each of these elicited a very different feel for me, suggestive of different elements of my character, her approach to love and the direction I wanted to point my readers toward. I thus had the opportunity to choose which one came closest to making Woods’ “one imaginative move.” My novel became richer and deeper.
All well and good, but what if the archeology metaphor hadn’t been in line with Claire’s story? I’d have discovered that my verb choices didn’t support my book, and I’d be doing everyone a favor by swapping them out for some that would.
And what if my verbs hadn’t revealed any metaphor whatsoever, or what if my draft was still full of “to be” verbs? No worries. We can still find a path by making metaphors.
5 Steps to Uncover Metaphors that Enrich Your Writing
The key to uncovering enriching metaphors is to not overthink your writing. As you follow these five steps, let your imagination run amok!
1. Get to know your character.
Before you start seeking out metaphors for your work in progress, it’s best to finish your first draft. At the very least, write a passage long enough to give you material to play with.
If you’re looking to practice making metaphors on the side, character prompts are a great place to start. For example:
X (verb) his eggs on Sundays.
X celebrates her/his birthday by (gerund (-ing) form of verb).
X won’t be able to (verb) after the operation.
X takes his/her sweet time when (gerund verb) the punching bag.
2. Look for delightful verbs.
In your work in progress or your character prompt practices, pick the verb that you are most delighted by. Look it up in your thesaurus, listing all its synonyms.
3. Build synonyms into metaphors.
List at least five abstract ideas you feel passionately about: justice, freedom, friendship, love. Combine them with the synonyms you found. For instance, “X uncovers love.”
Voilà: a metaphor!
4. Read your metaphors aloud.
Once you’ve created several metaphors, read them all aloud. Which one best represents Woods’ “entire imaginative move”?
5. Explore your metaphor through free writing.
Use the metaphorical clause you’ve chosen as the prompt for a five-minute free write. Again, don’t analyze: just write.
A Process of Discovery
As you walk through this exercise, you’ll learn about your character and the scenes in your story. You might find the metaphor is unexpectedly effective, or the exercise might reveal the metaphor doesn’t hold.
Either way, remember that metaphor-making is a process of creativity and discovery. Give yourself permission to play with your writing. Who knows? You might stumble across something wonderful.
What metaphors have you used in your own writing? Let me know in the comments.
It’s your turn to craft evocative metaphors. Take fifteen minutes to follow the first three steps:
- Complete the character prompts above.
- Pick your favorite verb from the bunch and look up its synonyms.
- Combine those synonyms with abstract ideas like freedom and truth.
Share your metaphors in the comments below, and be sure to leave feedback for your fellow writers. Which metaphors resonate with you and capture an “entire imaginative move”?
BONUS: If you finish with extra time on your timer, work your way through all five steps and share your free writing. Or, complete this exercise using your work in progress instead of the character prompts.