This guest post is by Lizzie Davey. Lizzie is a tea-loving freelance travel writer who spends her time between the UK and Barcelona. She blogs about the wonder of travel and the craft of writing at Wanderful World. Be sure to grab her free guide to becoming a Travelling Storyteller! Thanks Lizzy!

The smell of incense is thick and heady, mingling with the hours-old scent of burnt toast. Outside, it’s quiet except for the shrill yap of a dog or the rogue shriek of a child’s laugh. Inside, it’s cold – numb fingers tapping away at smooth, overused keys. The aftertaste of coffee lingers in my mouth, simultaneously bitter and sweet.

What did you notice about this paragraph?

Write with your senses

Yep, that’s right, I used all of the senses except sight.

How to Show, Don’t Tell Without the Sense of Sight

Now, even though I didn’t describe any physical attributes to you, I bet that these words have conjured up a picture in your mind anyway.

Maybe you’ve been transported back to your musty old student room where you burnt incense day and night, or maybe you’re imagining a cosy old coffee shop, filled with the warming scent of hot drinks.

Showing not telling is a common tip amongst writers, but what does that even mean?

For me it means exposing the reader to a scene via their emotions and sensory organs. It’s transporting them to a specific moment and dropping them right into the middle of it. It’s creating a three-dimensional setting rather than just giving a rundown of what’s visible in the immediate surroundings.

I’m a travel writer by day, which means I spend countless hours weaving words about other places – anything from big, busy cities to sprawling, white-sand beaches.

It’s easy to describe a place at face value, but travel writing is all about inspiring people to get out there and explore the world.

The best way to do this? By encouraging them to imagine they’re already there, of course!

How do you do this? Engage all the senses… except sight.

Why Should You Use All the Senses… Except Sight?

Ultimately, writing is simply a cluster of words on a page. It doesn’t have a deep, aesthetic quality like a painting so, as writers, we have to engage the reader’s senses and encourage them to paint a picture in their mind.

When writing, you want the reader to be able to imagine an entire scene coming to life simply through your words.

But we don’t want them to just imagine it—oh, no—we want them to feel like they’re actually there in the midst of the action. How?

Well, our memories are tapped into our senses and a trigger of these senses brings whole scenarios rushing back into our minds.

Think about it this way: how many times have you not been able to describe how a place made you feel but you can vividly remember the smell and the sounds? How many times has a fleeting smell jogged your memory but you can’t quite put your finger on where the memory took place?

It’s the same with writing.

The reader can connect their memories of smells, sounds, tastes, and touch to situations that you’ve written about, bringing them closer to the story (ergo, putting them in the middle of the action) and making it more meaningful to them.

Because that’s the ultimate aim of writing, isn’t it? To make people feel something.

Now close your eyes for a moment.

Do you notice that your other senses become more attuned? This is replicated in writing that doesn’t offer any physical descriptions. The reader’s secondary senses become stronger which allows them to fill in the gaps.

How To Successfully Pull Off Not Using Sight

Consider these two paragraphs:

The blue sky hung overhead, light and airy and as fresh as the white canopies that shaded the grills. Long, flat fish lay limply across the bars, turning from a shiny silver to a charred brown in no time at all. Underfoot, the concrete walkway glared with the brightness of the midday sun, just a few steps from the white sand that disappeared out into the blue sea.

And now this one:

The warmth of the midday sun hung close, making clothes sticky and foreheads sweat. Nearby, the gentle lapping of the waves mingled with the chirrup of birds flying overhead and distant chatter. Someone laughed loudly, cutlery clattered, and the buttery smell of grilled fish whirled upwards on the light breeze.

What are you thinking of after that?

The first paragraph paints a fairly comprehensive picture of scene, but it feels two-dimensional, don’t you think? The second paragraph, however, encourages the reader to fill in the gaps. What kind of setting do they picture with the sound of waves and birds and the smell of grilled fish?

It’s easy to see how you can use all the senses but sight when you put two paragraphs describing the same scene together like this. Remember:

  • Put yourself in the scene – what can you hear? What can you smell? Relay that information. Easy!
  • Get tactile – touch objects you’re trying to describe (if you can get your hands on them) for first-hand knowledge.
  • For every scene, try and drop in a descriptor for each sense.

Here’s another example, where I describe an object of interest.

The box was small and brown. On top there was a rectangular white label filled with thick black writing that had smudged at the edges. Each side was framed with sloppily applied grey parcel tape.

And:

The box had smooth surfaces interrupted with the bubbly bump of parcel tape. It was heavy to hold and smelt like musty old photographs and faraway lands. When it moved there was a soft tap, tap, tap and a low scratching sound like claws on carpet.

Which description is more intriguing?

It’s not difficult to use all the senses when writing, but sometimes we forget and find ourselves hung up on the way things look (isn’t that always the way?!). But it’s definitely a skill worth practicing so you can bring worlds to life and place your reader where they’re supposed to be – right in the centre of the action.

A good piece of writing transports the reader, and to do that you need to engage all the senses—not just sight.

How about you? Which senses are your favorite to write with? Let us know in the comments section.

PRACTICE

Spend fifteen minutes writing about your surroundings or a place you’ve been to recently using all the senses except sight. When your time is up, post your practice in the comments for feedback. And if you post, please be sure to reply back to your fellow writers.

Happy writing!

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